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Post by The Immortal Weapons on Oct 16, 2014 0:32:38 GMT -5
 PENDING APPLICATION
Thank you for applying to Marvel: Shattered Dimension, please allow us 72hrs to review your app before you bump or inquire about the process since we require two Staff members to approve your app. Once again, thank you for your time and being patient with us.
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Post by The Immortal Weapons on Oct 19, 2014 13:30:46 GMT -5
PLEASE REVISE
Thank you for taking your time and applying for Marvel: Shattered Dimensions, you application has been reviewed by the staff and we feel you are on your way but also feel like a few things need to be changed.
Personality:
We would like to see just a bit more in this section covering the why why and not just the what. While yes, Frank is very militaristic and is merciless when it comes to crime, there far more to him then just that. Frank is a tortured soul, the fact that he lost his wife and children to the mob is something that always sticks with him. It's what drives him to do what he does. Perhaps also mention how he acts around his peers, I doubt he treats them the same as he would the mobsters haha..I hope. ;D.
History:
There is some basic gamer and things like that that should be reviewed and cleaned up a bit to begin with if you wouldn't mind. As for the content, it was impressive, though maybe not fully required, a quick over view of his past and more detail in the recent would have sufficed but it showed you have a very strong grasp of this characters past and we love to see an RPer with such passion and dedication. Good work.
Role-Playing Sample:
This section being a key part of every application was surprisingly short and 'frankly' (hehe..bad joke..don't hurt me) we would rather see the effort placed here than the history. The biggest revision for this section is the main requirement for all applicants, it must show how Frank came to be trapped in NYC. Seeing as he is 616 universe in origin, if he was in NYC when things wen down we would like to see some mention of the effects of the Infinity Gauntlet taking place. Feel free to save the one you used as an open thread or something for the site. But this one needs to be that ground zero, day one, that he became trapped along with the others in NY oooorrrr got sucked in from some other part of the world after it happened. Even if you don't ever use it as a formal thread.
Once you have made the changed we have asked just bump this thread and we will look over it once more. And again, thank you for you’re the time for applying to Marvel: Shattered Dimensions.
Should you have any further questions feel free to PM myself or one of my fellow Staff and we will gladly give you a hand.
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Post by House of M on Nov 8, 2014 18:48:19 GMT -5
STATUS CHECK
This post is just a stratus check to make sure you are still with us. If you do not reply to this message with in 5 days we will mark this application as inactive and move it.
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